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Review:teh tarik says:
OK, so I meant to review this a couple of days ago when you first put the request in...but then I found myself flipping to the next chapter and the next...and now I've read up to Chapter 8. What?! You ended this chapter on a bit of a cliffhanger - I can't just stop reading - I don't have such control XD Expect a slow trickle of reviews from me over the next few days for the rest of the chapters!

But anyway anyway...THIS chapter. It's so hilarious and yet I have all the FEELS for Edie, doing all that hard work and not getting an ounce of credit for any of that. And feeling all that resentment - maybe not resentment but something else - for Lisa getting married and having the perfect life and discussing wedding cakes and all. And ROSE. Gah, there's this lovely (maybe not lovely) sharpness to her character - turning up late but with perfect makeup, and the way she gets Edie's work from her, just a crisp "Accio" like that...Rose is the colleague from hell :D Her life is probably as perfect as Lisa's in a completely different way, but she's quite the opposite of Lisa's niceness! Ooh lovely character contrasts!

Sigh. And Oliver Wood does not care very much for goblin feminism, I see...I haven't quite forgiven him for fooling me into believing he's Krum - clearly I'm not the most observant reader around. But I did soften a little toward him in one of the chapters ahead, where he runs into Edie in the hospital and apologises to her...gah, I'm so easily manipulated! ...and so is Edie :D Did I mention that I love Edie?!?!

The only thing that was a little jarring to me about this chapter was the way you introduced the magical typewriter; I think it's a fabulous contraption by the way, great idea! but I think you could incorporate that information about it a little more smoothly into the narrative. Break it up bit by bit, explain as Edie is typing...or something like that. Also, I'm not sure how well-acquainted Edie is with the Muggle world, but I suppose she must know it pretty well to compare her typewriter with the Muggle version of it.

Anyway, I think that's it from me and I hope I've made it clear how much I'm loving your story so far and oh Edie Edie Edie! Gah, I'll be back for sure :D Cheers :D

-teh

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I'm so flattered to hear (read?) that you like my story so much. You are such an incredible writer. Seriously. Bits and pieces from "A Lightness" keep popping into my head throughout my day because it just stuck with me so much!

Hmm, Rose's life being as perfect as Lisa's but in different ways... I'd actually never thought about it like that. Really interesting point, though! I think that Rose has some serious issues with self-confidence, which is why she is so quick to judge; why she watches what she eats so often; why she is dressed so meticulously and why she treats Edie the way she does (eventually.) But man, you are doing some better character analyses than even I am as their creator xD

I LOVE THAT YOU LOVE EDIE.

Thanks for the pointer on incorporating the magical typewriter into the story a bit better. You are totally right and I would never have noticed exactly what about this chapter seemed a bit off without you pointing it out. I also wanted to mention that her stepfather is a Muggle, but never found a good place to put it until much later chapters. Thank you so much for that advice, though, and I will definitely be working on that in my next editing spree (probably later today even!)

Again, thank you thank you thank you! It means so much to see that a talented writer such as yourself enjoys my story. :3


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