Hello! cypress here with your requested review. First, I just want to say, I absolutely loved this story. It was such an original idea, and I love you chose Filch as your main character. I thought you did a really good job of capturing his character. The part where you write that he would have to "strategize about that particular duty" made me laugh because it is so like Argus to take something so minor and turn it into something serious. He's the sort to take everything too seriously, including Peeves, so while I don't know that I'm expressing myself very well, I think that was just one instance where you showed how well you grasped his character.
I loved that you included the little detail about Mrs. Norris' name, and the crush on Irma was just precious! I also really liked how you described the snow. The word "bespeckled" is probably one of my favourites. Just, everything about this story was really enjoyable.
There were honestly only two things that gave me pause throughout the whole story. The first has to do with Dumbledore. I was a little surprised, to be honest, that he didn't seem to already "know" that Argus was a squib, and if he truly didn't, that he expressed no real surprise, and yet, offered so quickly to help him. The dialogue, though, was spot-on, I think. It's really just that he was caught off guard, but then at the same time, wasn't, that made me stop and wonder a moment.
The only other thing was the James & Co. cameo. I loved that they made an appearance, but the way you described Argus as young made me think of him as quite young - maybe early twenties at most. I had to rethink that when I saw the Marauders, though, perhaps the problem is merely that I always imagined Argus in the books as older - maybe late fifties/early 60s. It does work, and it was a cute detail, but it was the only other thing that made me stop and rethink my assumptions.
Anyway, I don't know how helpful that is. I don't really have any other constructive criticism to offer, but I really did love this piece. I'd love to see Argus again, and I would love to know what happened with him and Irma. I hope if you ever feel inspired that you won't hesitate to write it. You really have a fantastic grasp on their characters so it would be great to see more of them.
I do hope this helped, and thanks for requesting a review!
Author's Response: Hello, and thanks for coming by :)
Haha, yeah, Filch does take life a bit too seriously sometimes. In this story, I wanted to show that he really, really wants a job at Hogwarts, which is part of why he wants to execute his duties perfectly from Day One. I'm also glad you liked Mrs. Norris and Irma and the imagery I tried to include in this piece.
The way I see Dumbledore, he sort of intuits a lot about people, be it their motivations or their secrets or whatever. So I thought he would kind of figure Filch out and realize that he needs help, and that he deserves help. I imagine that would be unrealistic for most other people, but it's just how Dumbledore works in my head. Thanks for the critique, though, as those are really what I wanted. I'll go back and take a second look at him.
I did do some research on Filch, and according to the wiki, he started working at Hogwarts around 1973, which would have been in the Marauders' third year (if this is set in the winter). You're right that Filch is supposed to be in his mid-twenties at that time, and in this story. I agree that he looks older in the movies, which I attribute to exhaustion from all the hard work he's had to do over the years. But again, thanks for the critique :)
I really had fun writing these two, and though I don't currently have plans to extend this story, I may return to them at some point.
Thanks so much for your fantastic review!