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Review:CherryBoom says:
I'm definitely intrigued. =) You got me right from the short summary, since I haven't read any similar fanfics before. I haven't actually ever thought about what kind of future Viktor Krum might have after the war, but I can see it happening.

You used HP elements quite sparingly in the prologue. It felt more like it could belong to Dennis Lehane's book, or somewhere similar. But I love that kind of stories, so this is right up my alley. In fact, as soon as I had read this chapter, I checked how many chapters you've written it, since I prefer to read as much in one sitting as possible, if the story is particularly compelling as this most certainly is. I'm quite thrilled that there are so many chapters ready.

The plot is amazing. It's really original, and most importantly it has potential to keep readers on their toes. I'm also very intrigued to see how you will make full use of the mature rating. I've been quite hesitant to write mature scenes myself, since I'm not quite sure how far I can actually go. So this is going to be interesting in that sense as well.

I loved the dialogue and the suit guy. Apparently Krum doesn't know him yet, but I've good feeling that we will see more of him soon. =) The emotional ending was very well done. Usually I quite dislike the idea of reading the end first and then getting back to the beginning (at least I think that might be how you will write it), but I was very surprised how well it worked for you. Yeah, I'm sold. I promise to leave you more reviews, if you keep me as titillated as this first chapter hints. =P

Author's Response: Thank you, cherry! The magical elements are pretty sparse throughout, but I do my best to keep the characters canon (at least in personality). I'm glad to hear this might be your type of story. It's actually almost complete (just about four chapters left), so if you do get a chance to read more, it will be finished soon.

I was very leery to try a Mature story. It isn't so much mature in the graphic sense, as it is mature in the topics (substance use, mostly), and also just being more about adult problems. But it's been nice to push myself and try something new. And don't worry, I've been on staff for five years and I still get second opinions on content from time to time :)

I'm glad you liked the man in the suit. He will certainly be back in a big way in the future. And I'm glad you didn't mind the flashback, even if it isn't your favorite style. I'm kind of fond of writing prologues that are out of time-sequence with the rest of the story, but I can see why others might not like it as much.

I do hope you decide to read more. I'm always open to any and all feedback, good or bad. Thanks for the lovely review!

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