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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello, chica. I'm back again for chapter three. When I saw your name at the end of the review tag thread, I knew I couldn't pass up the chance to stop by with another quick review.

I loved your Ron in this chapter. He was spot on. A bit clueless, of course, but more than that, I loved the way he was over-compensating. Trying too hard to be casual with Hermione. It reminded me a bit of that part in DH 2 where Hermione suggests they go talk to Xenophilius, and Ron is immediately saying how wonderful an idea that is, just to try and make up for having left. Anyway, I thought there moment here was very true to form.

And it's nice to see you portraying Hermione as sad but still very much herself. Even heartbroken, she's still just as studious as ever. I wouldn't like Hermione near as much as a character if she totally fell apart over a boy -- Ron or anyone else. For a moment there, I thought you might have her ask Draco to Slughorn's party, but I'm really glad to see you're continuing to stick with canon, at least for the early stages of the story. And the line about Zacharias Smith was great. "He seemed to annoy everybody..." That totally made me giggle.

I'm curious to see where you'll take this next. I'm wondering if Draco will still crash the party, and how that might play out in terms of establishing any sort of the romance that will follow. So many questions!

Author's Response: To have you say that Ron is spot on in this chapter really makes my day! I want to try and keep each of the characters true to themselves and how they would act so its nice to know when people think I've got it right. As you know by now, with this story I'm trying to keep it pretty close to canon, adding in some of my own events here and there but for the most part, I want to build the dramione onto the canon events. I'm so glad that you've come on as my new beta! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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