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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Hey! I'm here with your requested review :)

Well, this sure does seem interesting! You've established the characters really well for only being the first chapter and I really like the relationships, especially between Ellie & Chris, Ellie & Rose and Albus & Chris!

About Ellie, I really like her :) She seems like a sweet girl and I really like her sense of humor; you can never get enough sarcasm! :P The dialogue between her and Rose & between her and the seer made me laugh. She obviously didn't believe in the woman and let it clearly show, which is a good preview to how her character will be later on.

The relationship she has with Albus is interesting! Since she is obviously super close with Chris, you'd think that she'd be close with Al, too! I wonder if there is an underlying reason why they "don't like each other"? I use quotations because obv. that's gonna change(; (PS Ellie is one of my all time favorite names! :P)

I thought the flow went really well throughout the chapter. It didn't seem like it was going too fast or too slow, and that can be sort of hard to do when you are writing a story where the characters aren't located at Hogwarts.

I feel like you've established a very good plot here and I can totally see it turning into a nice long story! I hope you get your muse back and that my review helped :)

When you get your other chapters out, make sure you come back and re-request! I'd really like to see how your story develops.


Author's Response: Fasted. Request. Ever. (Wow!)

Yay! Interesting! Yay again! It's good to hear that some of their personalities shone through, especially their relationships. Those three relationships may just be the most important of all in the entire story!

And how I adore sarcasm. Ellie talks a lot like how I think, so it's nice that you enjoyed her character! I think it's really important that you like main characters in stories, otherwise they become difficult to read. And her reaction to Madame C is definitely a common way she reacts to things!

And yeah - the Ellie/Albus relationship gets interesting. And there might be a reason they don't like each other...

Glad about the flow! I opened with a flashback, so I was worried that the time jump might be a bit awkward!

Thank you so much! I hope I get my muse back soon as well!

And I'll definitely re-request!

PS: Ellie's one of my favourite names, too!

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