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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Hey there, I'm here with your requested review! :)

This story seems really interesting and you've got a good plot going here! I've honestly never really read a story centered around Slytherins (I'm a Gryffindor fan) but I actually like it! I liked being able to see Tracey's interpretation of how Slytherins act; especially that they can be passionate with each other, yet know when to control themselves to make sure they look professional. Those little details always make a story a lot stronger and I liked it :)

I feel really bad for Tracey! She seems like the kind of girl who just sort of floats around and doesn't really have anyone to talk to :( Its good that shes more or less civil with her roommates, but then again, since she's a Slytherin and doesn't seem to have many friends in her own house, I can see why shes pretty much alone. The other houses didn't really associate with each other during the time period that she's in :/ You've characterized her very well and I'm really interested to know what the secret is! Is it that her parents are getting divorced? Or maybe that she's a muggleborn? (I'm guessing that she is by some of the clues you gave in the first few paragraphs :D)

I also really liked the characterization of Theo even though we really didn't get to see much of him. He seems to be one of the cunning Slytherins by wanting to get back at Daphne so bad! I'm curious to see how his little plan plays out and I really hope he doesn't hurt Tracey! She likes him so much :(

The flow of the story was pretty good. I liked how you transitioned really easily, but I it seemed to go a little fast from the common room, to her dorm, and then to potions the next morning. Maybe if you added a little more description; like her walking into her dorm room or the walk to her classes it would be a little easier to follow :)

Other than that little part, I really liked it! You've got an interesting plot and characters :) Feel free to re-request, I'll be interested to see where this story goes.

-Amanda

Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed this first chapter of my story! I really wanted to show a different angle on the slytherins and what it might be like to be them! I feel that Slytherins can still be passionate.. after all they are people so I wanted to use this story and show that while they come off as cold when they are around each other, they can be nice. As for Tracey's secret, lets just say that it is going to blow up in her face. I feel bad looking at this now and not having as much for Theo's pov and maybe someday i will come back and expand it a bit. I will also make sure to check out that bit about her being in the common room to her bedroom to potions and try to smooth it down a bit! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and for the suggestions!

~Slytherinchica08~


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