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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's me, I'm so glad you love my reviews and I can be useful to you:D Anyway here's your review!

Hmm, the start immediatly interested me, because you mentioned restaurants and their menu's so it makes you wonder whether that will be the place for Lydia and James's first date. Then you found it is and it's just like 'yay I guessed right!'.

You could see how Lydia was deeply effected by these brief encounters with James, by how she gets so frustrated over the fact he hasn't called in 3 weeks. This was great as you could see how her feelings have matured over time for him which makes the story more believable on the whole.

I thought the date scene was great as nothing would have been perfected and all of the waiting for it built up Lydia'd dreams of how great it was going to be. Then you can tell as soon as James gets to the door how this is going to go downhill by what James is wearing.

The awkward tension of the date was great, you just didn't want to read on to see how worse it could get. The fact they are both magical and the other doesn't know it, is great, because you're left wondering if they both knew about the enormous thing they both have in common would the date go better or not?

I can't wait for the reveal scene of when she finds out that James Thompson is in fact the famous James Potter. I'm also interested to find out the reason for James living with his 'mum' whether it's true or if it's disguising something else.

Overall I thought this was great, as you really engaged the reader and left them guessing over the fate of Lydia and James's relationship and how it's going to develop next. I really, really like this story so re-request whenever you want as it's a really enjoyable read, Kiana :D

Author's Response: hehe! My whole goal for this chapter was just to make their date as AWKWARD as possible. Cringing as much as possible. Total cheese. Because I do believe it is a HUGE setup for the rest of the plot. It's a metaphor for both of them.

Thanks for the reviews Kiana, I'm writing chapter 5 right now, and then I'll rerequest :)

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