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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hello, Elphaba back again. :)

Ooo, wow, Rita Skeeter is nastily in-character in this chapter! You do a really good job of making her a character that people love to hate. I can imagine the awful story she'll invent from her "interview."

The only critique I have is that I could use a few more details about the co-worker who comes to help Charlie. It'd be nice to know his name, what he looks like, maybe something general about his age (young, old, middle aged) and how well he and Charlie know each other (casual acquaintances or eat lunch together every day?). Even if he's a minor character, it would be nice to know these details.

The ending came as a neat surprise! I didn't see Charlie's abrupt departure coming, but I definitely like the idea of him embarking on an adventure ... I'm assuming that's where he'll meet your OC? ;)

I should be able to get to the next couple two chapters later this weekend; I'm looking forward to it!

Author's Response: Hello again!

I absolutely DETEST Rita Skeeter. I wasn't intentionally trying to keep her SO in-character (in fact, I was a little worried she might be out-of-character or overdone), but I'm glad to see that it turned out so well! I guess my hate for her really came out well on paper (or um... screen!) :P

Once again, you've brought up something that I hadn't really thought about before, and nobody else has mentioned, so thank you for being so insightful! I was concerned about continually calling him "The Coworker", but I hadn't really thought about providing any back story about his and Charlie's relationship. When I have the chance, that's something I'll definitely take a look at!

I'm glad the ending was a neat surprise! Yes indeed, Charlie's off on an adventure, and yes, that's where he'll bump into my OC, as you'll see shortly! :D

Thank you SO, SO MUCH for your amazing and thoughtful reviews! I look forward to getting more from you!! :D


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