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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi! Elphaba here with your requested review.

First of all, I love that you're writing about Charlie, since we don't get to see him very often compared to the other Weasleys. :)

I really like the relationship dynamics that you establish between Charlie and Bill as the two oldest brothers. We hardly see them together at all in the series, so it's great to see them together, here.

I think it's very interesting that Charlie is overwhelmed by guilt over Fred's death. If I have any suggestions about the writing overall, it is to show more of what Charlie is doing to let readers deduce his feelings, without telling us everything that he feels. For instance, I like the description of the hard lump that forms in his throat, and how he can't look his family members in the eyes -- that's enough information to show me that he feels guilty. I like Charlie's last message for Fred, as well, those three words reveal so much.

This story is off to an intriguing start! On to chapter two... :)

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you SO much for reading and reviewing this for me, and for getting to it so quickly!! :D

I totally agree; we don't get to see very much of Charlie in the series, which is precisely why I chose him. It gives me a bit of lead-way to play with events and characters, without straying too far from Canon! :D

The Charlie/Bill love here has definitely turned in to a crowd favorite! I had no idea how well it would work out when I first wrote it, so I'm gald to see that it's gone off so well!!

You're absolutely right about his actions revealing his feelings; that's something I hadn't thought about before. I will most definitely take that into consideration when writing future chapters! Thank you!! And yes, I think those three words for Fred really DO reveal a lot.

Thank you SO, SO much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! :D


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