Hi there! I read/reviewed Ending It, and I have to say that I'm pretty pleased that not only did Victoire find out about what had happened before they were married, but that Dom and Teddy got what they both deserved.
I loved the way you sent Victoire into such a spiral with this. From dreaming of the day when she'd become a bride, to learning about the two people she should be able to trust most and what they did to her.
I really do believe that Teddy does love her, but the fact that he still admits to loving done and wishing there was a way to have them both shows how selfish he really is.
I'm split about the letter. I like that that's how she found out, but I do think that it would be hard for Dom to do something as careless as leave a love letter from your sisters fiance detailing your affair together in your pocket, especially if going over to said sisters house. If you ever think of editing this, maybe Victoire going to Dom's and finding the letter there would make more sense? Not that where she found it even matters. What matters is the insane, amazing emotional impact you put into this piece. Though, I kind of wanted to see Victoire break a little more. Not in anger, you did the anger so amazingly. But she's ending something that was such a huge part of her life for so, so long. Not that she's wrong in doing so, and I love that you had her actually ending it, but it seems like she would have been more conflicted with everything. almost wanting to believe Teddy's promise, but knowing it wasn't true. Though, I suppose that small Veela percentage could weigh in, giving way to pretty much just anger.
I absolutely LOVE that you showed us both interactions between her and the two who betrayed her. I swear, if part three is those two dancing off to live a happy life together, I'm going to glare at them both in a very VERY mean way. That's the best 12+ threat I could come up with :P
Your writing was paced really well for this, the intensity and fast paced feeling matching such a dramatic situation, and made this feel like it was over before I barely read the first sentence!
I've absolutely enjoyed both your stories revolving around these two and Teddy, and am curious if there will be another to follow! Hint hint... haha ;)
Author's Response: Hi!
Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing!
Haha you are a bit harsh, but anyhow I couldnt let Victoire marry Teddy in blissful oblivion xP
I am glad you liked the "spiral" of Victoire's emotions as I worked hard on getting it right.
Yes, Teddy loves Victoire, and he loves Dom too, yet he is so selfish and needy.
Oh dear, I didn't think of that! Thanks for pointing it out! Now that I see, it is quite silly (and unrealistic) of Dom to carry the letter with her while going to Victoire's. I think I'll edit and make it the other way round (of Vic visiting Dom). I'll edit it when I have ample time :)
I thought about the Veela part weighing in actually, of her anger clouding over everything else. Plus, I see Victoire as a very strong character and I think that she wouldn't allow the other softer side of hers overcome her anger and hurt towards Teddy.
Haha don't worry, I won't have Dom and Teddy living happily ever after in part three (if there ever is a part three). I dislike Teddy too much to let him have either Dom or Victoire at all xP
I am so happy after reading your lovely review, thank you! Its great to hear that you liked the pace, intensity, and such, and that you enjoyed both the stories!
I'll see if I'll do a part three or not xD