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Review:The Misfit says:
*sigh* So through this chapter I was thinking that I would eventually have some kind of respite from the last chapter with a nice, calm-ish one, albeit uncertainty-filled, and then you go and write that ending! GAH.

Sirius' characterization is done perfectly down to a tee. That kind of behaviour is what I think that JKR would have written had she written Marauders era, or even the flashbacks of the consequental aftermath of James saving Severus' life. (Yes, I just compared you to JKR! :P)

Oh, and I caught another typo - here you go: "Bethís inside felt..." should have another S at the end of inside. ;)

I really liked that moment between James and Beth, where she tells James about her attraction towards Severus. His reaction just shows how much his maturity has developed since the end of fifth year - unfortunately, Sirius hasn't quite gotten the concept of maturity yet - so it's lovely to see this characterization of James. He acts like he's Beth's big brother too (which is absolutely adorable, might I add), so I've worked out that if he's older than her, Beth's birthday is anywhere between March 28th and August 31st inclusive. And now I'm wondering if you've actually mentioned when Beth's birthday is yet... I have too many Snape/Beth feels to form some kind of comphrensive sentence in my mind - this review is currently being written by my hands, who are forming every word by themselves. (Apparently my hands have brains inside them!) They also thank you for yet another breath-taking chapter.

Memo to self: find thesaurus lurking underneath impossible pile of books and DVDs. I'm running out of compliments to describe you. :3

Anyway. Back to the chapter! The scene with Beth and Lily was lovely, although I was almost certain that the first Quidditch match was between Gryffindor and Slytherin in November, but of course you've changed it to fit your plot. XD

And here I come again to my Snape/Beth feels. I know a good angsty story is always fun to write - but it's not fun when you leave cliffhangers like that! D: Then again, I'm being hypocritical here, so feel free to disregard that last paragraph!

Onwards to chapter 10... I will finish reading this story tonight or tomorrow at the latest, I promise. :3

PS: Why does it feel so long since chapter one? So much has happened, and yet it's only nine chapters and we're somewhere in the beginning of December? *sigh* This should be a warning about this story... but then again, I've never stopped reading a story I liked in the middle of the story. XD

Author's Response: Ahaha! Sorry to not be able to give you a breather! ♥ Although I am BEYOND flattered that you compared me to JKR in any respect -- seriously, that was such a lovely thing to say. :) Sirius's characterization is one that is very firm in my head, and is for some reason not like a lot of other people's, if other fic can be compared to it.

James is definitely supposed to be a bit more mature than Sirius -- at least in my head! -- but fully mature is something I feel neither of them can fully achieve, unfortunately. Partial maturity, yes, but never all the way. :D The funny thing about James is that he is a sort of older brother figure to Beth, but he is actually younger than her. Her birthday's in the middle of February. :) I don't think I mention it in the first book... no, well. I think it gets mentioned around February, so not before, so you had no way of knowing!

I did change the Quidditch match schedule, yeah. I mean... sometimes it just works better, stuff like that. :P Oh well. And please don't feel as though you're on a deadline to read this story, of course! It's not going anywhere, and you've been so lovely, I don't want to make you feel as though you're being pressured or what have you.

♥ You are seriously too kind. I don't even know how to keep thanking you for all of these incredibly nice reviews!! You're awesome!


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