So, I read this chapter title and did the 'what??' thing in my head. And started wondering if I was going crazy because I didn't remember anything that had to do with a paper cut.. haha. You sneaky girl. Before I review review, I have to say that I love the final set up of this.
Not only do I love the very intense feelings finding the letter gives Eleanor, but I really like where you put that in. It's a really perfect way to break up the chapter, and her wanting to escape the scene when the discussion was turning to heavier things and get the catnip was so perfect for this awesome character you've created. Little did she know that she'd escape the talk of death and war, only to throw herself into a different kind of turmoil. Poor girl :(
Your line about her not thinking it's so bad that she didn't want to give all her soul to the cause, that was her refusal (or not acceptance, I guess) really bad enough to get her exiled? Although, this is coming from Eleanore, so I'm sure she hasn't sent flares out trying to contact Sirius either.†Anyway, you built up a lot of Sirius's character without even having him there. We know what the Order means to him, how important fighting against Voldemort is, and you drove that home with this little section.
I can never get over how much I enjoy Eleanor's sarcastic personality.†I think she'd be an awesome friend to have, haha. Really, though. She's very, very easy to relate to.
Ahhh the ending isn't any easier to read the second time :(. It's hard, because I feel so sad that so much in Eleanor's life is changing, but at the same time you can't blame him for leaving with his family. I think you do a really excellent job making sure we understand how hard things really were during this war, how quickly people were disappearing and how severely friends were separated ;(.
Awww thank you for your sweet mention in the AN ♥ I'm so happy I'm able to help, even if it's just a small amount ♥ Now! I hope you are typing speedily away at chapter 5, because I am quite curious as to what comes next... *ninja face*
Author's Response: Hahaha, yes, i'm glad that little scene fit in well with the rest of the story. I always feel a little bit iffy with inserting scenes into a chapter after it's been written because it always sounds awkward. However, I think that is what the chapter needed to make it a tiny bit better anyway :P Thanks for the suggestion! Seriously!
Ah, her exile, well, we will learn more about it in a few chapters from now, not the next one i don't think but probably the one after that. I think Sirius wouldn't have necessarily written her off no, but for a time he would have been irritated at it all. Anyway, that's all i'm going to say.
I like how you can read her as a character and know that she probably hasn't done anything either. It is true, she's not that kind of person (Lord forbid that she admits that she likes the guy and has emotions, gah!) and she may also be a bit dramatic about the whole thing as well. So take it with a bit of salt because all this is from her biased perception of the situation.
Anyway, i'm really happy you still like her sarcastic ways. When i was challenged to write humour as a genre (obviously it's only a very small part of the story) i was wary because i don't write humour well. However, as Gilbert Blythe told Anne Shirley once 'write what you know' so i made her sarcastic and dry. It's the humour i know and can write with some degree of success. (shocking i know)
ANYWAY GAHH! Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing, it's was so lovely and THANK YOU so much for betaing this. You are incredible! *fails about* Chapter 5... well i know the outline and i've opened up a document, however there is a few other projects i'm telling myself to work on so... >=D you may have to wait in your suspense ^_^