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Review:The Misfit says:
I'm back! I know I disappeared there for a little while, but I needed sleep and food. ;)

I loved this chapter! I liked how you kept Beth out of the situation by having her too emotional to transform into her Animagi form - that sounds really plausible, and explains how it was James, and only James, who saved Severus' life.

I also liked the way you wrote Severus in this - angry, and irritated at James, and mistrustful of the Marauders, thinking that it's all one big prank to them. And as for Sirius, he's one of my favourite characters - but I am under no illusions as to how flawed he is - and even I was fully approving of James shoving Sirius, and shouting at him so loudly he could wake up the whole castle. :3

Oh, Beth. My heart was breaking as I read about Beth's emotional washing machine-esque feelings; the adrenaline has gone now that the danger is over, and all those feelings just hitting her square and bowling her over. Ahhh. I just wanted to hug her!

Oh, and I especially like that little bit of humour you added with James kicking the Fat Lady and her indignance. It's the little things like that that stop a chapter from getting too dark, I think. XD

Oh, and I caught a typo: "The sentence caused Severus distinctly uncomfortable and out of place" - it should be "caused Severus to feel distinctly uncomfortable". ;)

But otherwise, yet another truly amazing chapter. ♥

Author's Response: Sleep and food always come before fan fiction. :D No apologies necessary, Kate dear!

I don't know where I hit upon the idea of Animagi being affected by emotions -- probably along the lines of Tonks in the sixth book, with her emotions about Lupin -- but I'm glad you liked it and found it plausible!

I think this chapter is one of my favorite Severus-being-Severus chapters. And reading back over that sentence, it really makes no sense, but -- no, I'm changing that. I really liked writing the emotions of everyone here, Severus and James and Beth and even Sirius, because for some reason it was just one of those magical times where everything CLICKED and I felt like I got it right, you know? (Ew. I sound so conceited when I say that. I promise I don't mean to!) Sirius needs to be put in his place every now and then, and James wouldn't always have been behind him 100%, without a doubt -- and it goes the other way, too. And then Beth kind of just has a meltdown there. :P She probably needed your hugs quite badly.

Thanks for catching that typo! ♥ Looking at this, you'd think I hadn't edited at all. Whoops! And thank you, too, for yet another great review. :)


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