|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
Hey there! It's Courtney, here for your requested review:)
I have to admit, when I first read that this was an Argus Filch/Irma Pince story, I was a little skeptical. But I shouldn't have been, because I actually really enjoyed this one-shot! Is was very sweet, and even a little sad at times-I actually found myself feeling sorry for Filch, which is something I never thought possible!
I really enjoyed the way you started this one-shot, with the descriptions of Hogwarts. For me, the line; 'Unfortunately, all the fireplaces in the castle couldn’t make the visitor feel welcome' summed up exactly what Filch was probably feeling, and reminded me of how out of place he must feel, in a school filled with talented witches and wizards. Your use of language is outstanding, and very sophisticated, which makes me feel as though I am reading a professional story.
Your characterization of Dumbledore is pretty much spot on. I especially liked the line “Oh, a bit too early for that judgment, I think". For me, that line is so perfectly Dumbledore-however there were a couple of lines that did seem a little out of character, such as '“Forgive me for speaking so boldly, Mr. Filch, but most wizards have experience caring for house elves and owls, and even your one-time run-in with a banshee does not put you considerably ahead of the pack.” But that is me nitpicking, because you asked for constructive criticism and I am having trouble finding any!
I liked the appearance of the marauders, because it really showed how Filch slowly became the grouchy caretaker the Hogwarts students loved to loathe-it certainly would get tiresome after awhile, constantly picking up after the students who mistreated you and didn't take you seriously.
I feel as though your portrayed Irma Pince very well. In the books, she is an irritable librarian who doesn't seem to like the students at all and in this one-shot, we can already see a little of this shining through. I liked the line “No, some of them are tolerable. Most, though… ungrateful brats. If they knew how much their parents paid for them to attend this school, they’d shape up, I tell you.” The similarities in the characters of Argus and Irma make the fact that they could have had a relationship so much more believable.
Overall, I think this is a great one-shot, and I love the little details you have included-such as the introduction of Mrs Norris the kitten and the awkwardness the surrounded Argus and Irma as they talked about Muggle literature. Everything just flowed brilliantly, and I am very glad I had the opportunity to read this!
Author's Response: Hi Courtney! Thanks for coming by to review!
Haha, well, one of the things I enjoy most about writing fanfiction is trying to put a new spin on characters we think we know. It was tough to try to make Filch likable, but I'm glad I succeeded! I felt sort of sorry for him, too.
Wow, thanks so much for your compliments! I'm happy you liked the way I set the scene and introduced things with Filch walking in.
It's great that you felt like Dumbledore was done well, too. He's a tough one to crack, but I like playing with his dialogue because he says some really funny and interesting things sometimes. I agree that the one line you picked out doesn't quite jive perfectly, though, so I'll have to go back and have a look at it. Thanks for giving me the critique I needed!
I'm pleased to hear that you liked the way Argus and Irma interacted and bonded over their mutual dislike of people like the Marauders. It's weird to see James and his friends from the outside looking in, that's for sure, but I can see why Filch disliked them so.
Thanks again, so much, for the thoughtful review!