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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hiya! Here I am again, back for chapter four-and I'm still loving every moment of it!

Your writing style is just so...perfect. Everything you write just flows so well. There are no awkward gaps or disjointed paragraphs and you somehow manage to hook me in from the first sentence of the chapter every time. I can seriously see you becoming an famous author one day-and when you do, please remember me:)

I really enjoyed the way you eased into this chapter. How you briefly let us know that Brienne was becoming more comfortable at Hogwarts and forging a good friendship with Fred and George. The little details you included, such as how she 'had quickly gotten used to their hyperactive and mischievous banter' and how 'George rolled around in his seat with laughter as Fred cried out, outraged at his ruined breakfast' add a extra depth to this chapter, which is brilliant.

I feel as though you wrote the letter from Brienne's father perfectly, and it was all very mysterious. I felt so sorry for Brienne when I found out her mother had been attacked and killed which begged the question: why? And how? I am now more curious than ever and am loving how many questions this story is giving me. It was also so adorable how George rushed after her!

I loved the owlery scene. It was definitely my favourite part of the whole chapter. Brienne's emotions just felt so raw and real, and I even felt my own eyes getting a little watery-especially when George joined her. I think my favourite paragraph was: 'But his words were lost. As George pulled away from the hug, Brienne had stopped crying. She sniffed, staring at George curiously. She tilted her head slightly to the side, and stared into George's eyes. A funny feeling tugged in her chest.' It just perfectly summed up the current relationship between Brienne and George, and hinted slightly at what is to come, without ruining the pace of the story.

I really liked the slight awkwardness in the air when Fred barged in on Brienne and George. This: 'George awkwardly patted her on the back and pulled away as Fred rushed in, the letter in hand. He stared at the two of them briefly before clearing his throat' was a great line, as was '"Yeah," George replied, getting up and going up the left staircase whilst Fred frowned at him, for once not knowing what was running through the mind of his brother.'

The fact that Brienne's mother was leaving to go somewhere before she was killed I find very interesting, and I can't wait to find out what happened to her-I like that, through Brienne's explanation to the twins, we found out more about her past and why she was brought to Hogwarts, but were still left with many more questions. And the patronus scene at the end was a great way to end this chapter!
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi! You know, I'm really beginning to adore your reviews! I always feel better after reading them. If I'm a famous author one day I will dedicate the book to HPFF and certainly name my favourite reviewers xD I will never forget it here!

Everything you say is so flattering! Generally I think these first few chapters are the worst ones, so I'm glad you think they're good :) There are answers coming in the future (aswell as more questions!), along with developments in the George/Brienne relationship, and I hope you enjoy the journey :)


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