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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review Tag 2 thread.

You grabbed my attention so hard with all of Regulus's thoughts on drunken Avery. They were absolutely hilarious. I don't know why Avery always seems to be portrayed as a dangerous, drunken buffoon in fan fiction, but I like it. The idea of him as some sort of terrifying tooth fairy from hell was the greatest thing I've read all day.

Wilkes and Rosier were pretty entertaining, too. Peter Pan complexes and raging misogyny aside, they set up a really nice contrast against the direction that I assume Regulus will be heading in. Wilkes's mother must have been so upset by his actions. Just so I'm being an equal-opportunity hater of all things pureblood society, the idea of matronly pureblood mothers dying to marry off their daughters to the first "proper" suitor who comes along was also quite amusing.

Regulus's initial thoughts on Bess Merriwether obviously aren't encouraging, but it was promising that he decided to keep her out of harm's way, even if it was only to preserve his ability to act as a spy for Voldemort. There are certainly far worse ways that he could have ejected her from the dungeons. He's so pompous and full of himself, but I like the way that she stood her ground. Maybe she had no idea how much danger she was really in, but I like her spunk.

Your writing was definitely kind of rough in this. I saw a number of things that looked like typos or words that were out of place. Another good read-through might really help.

You've set up a really interesting premise here and I'm very interested to see where you take it. Not only that, but I think I've run out of things you've written that I haven't reviewed, so you really need to get on the stick here! ;) Nice job!

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for the wonderful review. =)

This story is kind of my problem child, since the prologue has quite a different tone from this chapter. I guess I've to decide whether to make Reg more agressive in the prologue, or just soften this a bit. Probably both.

I'm glad you get my humor, it tends to run bit dark at times, but that's just the way it is. =) My Slytherins are such a bunch of misfits, they are really fun to write because of that. They seem to have much bigger ideas of themselves, than what they can cash in reality.

Yeah, even though it has been beta read, it still seems to have some inconstancies there. I have to look into it.

Actually, I think you have missed my Voldy one-shot. =P But no worries, I'm going to update soon again. =)


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