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Review:CherryBoom says:
Well, that was quite a helpful mirror. =) I'd love to quote Arthur Weasley's advice about never trusting things without brains, but this particular mirror feels like it could be a Lupin family heirloom. It certainly knows Remus very well. Only thing that I'm not quite sure is that how the mirror could know how Tonks feels about Remus. Of course it could have heard something when someone from the order visits him, but since it's in his bedroom, that's pretty unlikely. =/

Ah well, it's pretty unfortunate to leave a wand at home, if you're a wizard. Apparently he doesn't have keys even though all his neighbours are muggles? How does he go in when there is a neighbour standing near by? It sounds bit risky all things considering.

I quite like that you threw all these hurdles at them, before they could enjoy their date. It feels bit unlikely that they would talk about the order in middle of the pub, because it's a secret organization. I really like the werewolf activist part of the story, I could read more about her since she sounds like a very interesting character. Maybe you could write a story about her in the future?

I'm glad that they had a good time after all the little bumps on the road. A kiss is always a good way to end the story. And that mirror sure is a nosy one. =)

As you can see, there were some loopholes in your story, but otherwise it was well plotted and easy to read. The descriptions were particularly good and helped to set the tone and livened up the characters.

It was fun to read, and very fluffy and cute. I quite enjoyed it. =)

Author's Response: Hello there!

The mirror was one of my favourite bits of this story to write, although you're right that it's knowledge on Lupin's personal life is maybe a bit extensive :/ I see what you mean about the keys as well... I was sort of counting on wizarding ignorance of Muggles to explain that, but it is a little thin. Plotting is something I find difficult, so thanks for pointing those inconsistencies out!

Well I wouldn't want to make it too easy for them :P I'm glad you liked the werewolf activist- hmmm yeah she would be an interesting character... you've got me thinking about her now!

I do see what you mean about the loopholes. This was written for a deadline, and I can see that it could have been rather better thought through... Thankyou for picking up on some of the flaws, and for taking the time to leave such a helpful review :)


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