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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello! It's me again :D

I found interesting that you made Fred as the main enemy of Percy's not George as well. I'm glad you did as I found that Fred tended to be the main perpatrator of most of the crimes so that seems a good idea.

Though it was a brief mention of how Percy and Penelope broke up I'm gad you added that line in as their romance was always a mystery to me. I just assumed that they would end up together as who else would date Percy? Then you find out he's married Audrey and it's like your minds exploding!

I noticed a few misplaced captial letters here and then, but rereading it again would get rid of it. Also I just assumed from the food Mrs Weasley made and the food served at Hogwarts it was muggle food, so I'm not sure whether they would refer to it as muggle cuisine.

One thing I'm not so keen is the fact Fred and George don't seem as close as they are in the books. I think that's one of the key reasons why those twins are so popular is because they're so close and act like they're one.

I like how you include little details such as Angelina's owls being called Athena, and Athena's sign being an owl ;D

I still really like the characters and all the interactions they have with one another as I feel it's believable and genuine. I think some of my favourite scenes are the twins winding up Percy. He's just so funny when angry! Kiana!

Author's Response: Hello!

Welcome back! For some reason, I always thought that Fred and Percy had a really tense relationship, it always seemed to me in the books that they never got along. I wanted to play around with that and the fact that Fred and George are pretty different when it comes to how they interact with their other siblings. ;)
You know, I am so with you on the thing with Penelope! I always assumed that she and Percy would wind up and get married. But then she just vanishes in the books after so long and never mentioned again! I was so confused as to why that happened and then JK just dumps Audrey on us without any information! All I know is that she's Muggle but her relationship with Percy is completely unknown. Which is also why I made a story about it! :D Its called "This is Audrey Tang: The Bad Taste" on my page if you want to read that but be warned, its very mature.
And there are moments of panties being mentioned more than once or twice.
Anyhoo! I'll go back and correct the mistakes made in this chapter. I rushed a little too much and didn't edit as cleanly as I should have!
And I really do think I need to point out that the Muggle Cuisine is more of a foriegn food restaurant. I don't know why I keep forgetting! >:( My fault!
I actually got a comment in another review about the twins not appearing as close as they are in the books. In my mind, personally, I wanted to make them different, as the thing with them being so much alike gets rather old.
I'm sure that, even though they're twins, they fight and argue and get on each other's nerves just like anyone else's siblings. I think playing around with that does give their relationship a bit more depth adn is something different I guess. But I'm sure that not everyone likes it, I wasn't even aware of how much of a change I'd made in them until yesterday. :p
Oh, I love details! My favorite Greek Goddess just so happens to be Athena and I had to put it in there. Hahahah. I love Greek mythology too so this may not be the end of the gods/goddess names popping up. :D
I'm really glad that you still enjoyed this, it means alot and I really loved your review! Feel free to pop in any time you like!
Much love,
Gabbie


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