|Review:||The Misfit says:|
I'm back! (And procrastinating on writing, whoops.) I did have all of this written in the early hours of this morning, but then I accidentally deleted the entire review. *sigh* Oh, and brownies are always a good form of bribery. ;)
Back to the actual review now- Peter Pettigrew, I do not like you at all. I'm suspicious of his motives to have two Marauders with Remus, instead of four. And only he would think it acceptable to bring up such a subject in the Great Hall! *headslaps Peter* "Do you want Beth to eat you?" was probably one of the most hilarious lines that I've ever read- I LOVED it!
I also love Beth's reaction when she realizes that Severus is staring at her and her friends. I like how she doesn't instantly assume that he's staring at her specifically and swoons over that, but is concerned for Remus and their secret. It's so good to read a crush that doesn't involve major judgement impairment, if that made sense? ♥
I really how Sirius imparts the information about the Order- making it all mysterious and not quite real, as Beth feels, but I am slightly confused as to how Beth knows what the Order is called given that Sirius doesn't mention it. *hides*
I also like the way that she thinks Dumbledore is incapable of running a secret organization against Voldemort- it really highlights how she doesn't have a position of responsibility and therefore has no concept of the amount of sheer paperwork that Hogwarts must generate. Although being the genius that you are, you probably wrote that so that Beth was thinking that Dumbledore has so much paperwork-related stuff to do that he probably doesn't have time to run an organization in addition to a school... :3
Severus SPEAKS! And there I was thinking that he was going to remain mute throughout the story... ;) I love how Beth remained loyal to Remus, even though it was so awkward for her considering that it was her first conversation with her crush of six years!
I really love how you've written Lily- she isn't majorly featured in the story, but nor is she mysteriously absent. It's so good that you can tell that James likes her- suddenly getting enthusiasm for his Head Boy duties when she turns up- but it doesn't completely rule his life.
I only have a couple of questions for clarification- #1. Why are Lily and James shepherding first-years to Gryffindor Tower when that's normally the duties of the fifth-year Prefects? and #2. Why would Sirius be calling Severus by his first name while questioning Beth, considering how much they hate each other?
Overall though, this is another amazing chapter- as always! You're too talented!! *munches happily on brownie while moving on to chapter four*
Author's Response: Ooh, that always stinks, doesn't it? Losing reviews is never fun. I'm doubly appreciative of your writing it all out for me again! (And darn you... now I want brownies!)
Poor Peter -- loads of people were suspicious of him at that part, and quite honestly, I didn't mean for them to be! Though I can't blame you for being wary, of course, knowing what he becomes.
I think Beth is kind of thinking at this point that she's liked Sev for so long that nothing will ever come of it, you know? But Severus does speak for the first time in this chapter! ♥ I did tell you we were getting there!
Ah, you caught another slip-up of mine. Many thanks! Working in all the stuff about the Order and keeping it as canon as possible was a bit trickier than I'd imagined, and especially in these earlier parts of the entire plot. But of course Beth wouldn't know the name of it. :P I think that's something that got left in after I rewrote the paragraph previously, while writing the chapter. You're an astute reader -- I love that!
I never got the impression that Lily ruled James's life, and I'm glad you didn't either; honestly, sometimes I wonder where cliches originate, and who thinks they're a good idea in the first place. :P As for your questions -- well, there's no specifically good reason for Lily and James to be shepherding first-years, but somehow I never got the impression it was only fifth-year prefects who did that. Of course, it's been ages since I read the books, and I'm sure I'm off-base. Ah, well! And I did change Severus's name to Snape when it came from Sirius's mouth. I've actually been really conscious of that, but I do mess up on occasion! Good eye!
You're much too kind. ♥ I am still so, so happy that you left me all these reviews, and in such a short time span, too. You're fantastic, Kate!! :3