|Review:||The Misfit says:|
Because I forgot to mention it in the last review, and I'd just clicked Submit when I remembered that I wanted to say that I love the way you included Peter as a proper part of the Marauders. It really irks me when authors portray him as evil in seventh year, or just make him fade into the backgroud, so I am ridiculously, lunatically happy that you didn't do this. XD
I'm liking Amelia Bridger from what we see from her, and when I say that I mean I like her as a character and the way she behaves and her strained relationship with Beth affecting the latter- and am I even making sense here? *hides*
They were putting plastic wrap on the mens' toilets?! Bahahahaha! That actually reminds me of when I used to put clingfilm on toilet seats with my best friend as a kid. :P (Ironically enough, her name was Bethany!) Which goes back to what I already said in my last review: you're making them so relatable and making it so realistic that I can actually visualize myself there, hiding under James' Invisibility Cloak and watching them! XD I like how Sirius dropped Beth's trunk on Remus' foot- that sounds like something that Sirius would do! (Was it because he'd noticed a newly-blonde Marlene McKinnon walking past?)
*dies of laughter at the story about Petronilla Lowenstein and Remus* Okay, I feel sorry for Petronilla because who wants a boyfriend half a foot shorter than her?- but I feel sorry for Remus more. (I'll freely admit that I'm biased.)
I apologize for the nit-picking, but I spotted a typo: "His gaze was direction above..." should be directed.
Severus! Severus! Severus! I'm so glad we see him at last; it feels like so long has passed and yet so little time has passed at all. Sirius' behaviour was horrible and yet so accurate in terms of his character! I like how Beth hated how he was behaving, but didn't want to jump to Severus' defence instantly knowing how her friends would react. And that ending where she deliberates whether she should run after Severus or stay with her friends was just so perfect and gave me so many Severus/Beth feels! :3
You are too awesome, Rachel. ♥
Author's Response: I'm glad you appreciate Peter! His character was something I set out to write very intentionally at the onset: Like you, it sort of bothers me when people write him off as no good in his school years. There had to be good qualities about him, or James and Sirius and Remus wouldn't have been his friends; you can see that from how they treat Snape in the fifth book. But anyway, don't want to be preaching to the choir! :P
Beth's mum is deliciously horrid, and if there had been more room to write her into the books, I would have. She does crop up a few other times, though! And of course, I'm still so happy you're liking the Marauders. Characterization is pretty big for me, as far as writing goes, and I do put a lot into it; reviews like yours are what makes me KNOW it's worth it, you know? (It's not a far-off guess to surmise Sirius dropped Remus's trunk from staring at Marlene's hair! Probably is what happened, actually.)
Never feel as though you have to apologize for spotting errors! I always want to make my work as clean and polished as possible, and I don't always spot typos myself. So thank you for doing it for me!
A wild Snape appears at last! He is a main character in this story, I promise. :P But then again, you've already read, what, eleven chapters beyond this? (Woah!) So I'm sure you knew that! ♥ Ah, Kate. These reviews made my entire week. Thank you very, very much, as always!!