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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Wow! What a story!!!

This was definitely fine as a stand-alone, and I'm really glad that I got to read it. I am amazed by how crazy and emotional it was, but take that as a good thing. :)

There were just so many swirling emotions throughout, I'm pretty pleased with how you dealt with them. This was a really huge thing to write about, even though it was short. It takes a lot of pluck to write something like this, even if it hasn't happened (that you know of). Well done!

The only thing I would suggest is that when Victoire is yelling at Teddy, I could use some more description. How are they standing? How are they reacting to each other? A few bits of action in between the words they are saying will help turn the last part into just as powerful of an explosion as the first part was.

Gah... I hope what I've said makes sense. :p
At any rate, the only thing you really need to get from this insane review is that I really enjoyed the story. It was really well written and just plain awesome. :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

The first line of your review has me grinning, thanks xD

I had a little bit of difficulty dealing with all the emotions, and I gave it my best, so I am glad that you are pleased with them. Well, it has happened to me (sort of) so I do know about it, and thus why I wrote, but yeah thanks!

Hmm, thanks for the suggestion. If and when I do an edit, I'll surely try to add in more description and action between Vic and Teddy's dialogue.

It all definitely makes sense :)

Thanks again for your awesome review!


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