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Review:SereneChaos says:
Cypress! What a lovely first fic! I hope there's many more. :)

As usual, you do a very good job focusing in on a character's thoughts and emotions. I think Remus' train of thought was right on the money, and I can't help but feel that this particular story is really letting you use your RP skills well.

I have some mixed feelings about the ending. I know it was for a challenge, and in keeping with the terms of the challenge, I think you did a very good job. Even so, I can't help but feel that there's something MORE wanting. As if, you build up this beautiful scene where Sirius walks into the room...only to drop to the end very quickly. As a reader, it's not very satisfying, though I can see how for the sake of the story, it makes a lot of sense (as not everything can be dramatized, can it?). So, like I said, mixed feelings.

You're off to a great start! I'll look forward to reading more of your stories (and maybe even seeing you branch away from RP-like fics)!

Author's Response: Serene, my dear! What a lovely first review. ^_^ Thank you for it! As far as the ending, I can see what you mean. I'll need to really think about that and how I'd want it to go. I almost feel like this could be a much longer story, and have considered expanding it (though of course I was sort of limited by a deadline). And as far as RP-like fics, we never do forget our roots, do we? :P I agree. I'm pretty pleased with it for a first piece, but I'm hoping to move towards developing other aspects of my writing. We'll just have to see how it goes. ;) Thanks again for your review, and for all your wonderful encouragement.

x cypress


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