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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm avec your review:) I was glad to have a Founders era story to read as I really do love them due to the creativity you can have when writing.

I really liked how it was told in first person as generally Founders stories were told in thrid person so you don't get such an insight into the character. It was also interesting that you chose Helga to narrate from as most people consider her a minor character so I'm glad you're giving her a greater focus. You can also tell straight away where the Hufflepuff traits came from so it's nice that you've already incorporated that into the first chapter.

I thought it was interesting that you made Helga and Godric muggleborns as I always invisaged them as purebloods, however, due to the Gryffindor and Hufflepuff houses being so open to muggleborns, I can see how it ties in.

I felt that the whole introduction to Rowena and Salazar was a little rushed from them meeting to making the school. This was only written about in 2 paragraphs, and considering what a major turning point this was, I personally, would have dwelled on it a little more.

Even though you said you were winging the details on the middle ages I found that they seemed accurate and you didn't question them at all. I may have chosen a more old fashionend name than Gareth but it's not too modern to be conspicuous.

Overall I thought it was great start and I like how you had that interaction between Salazar and Helga at the end as it gives you hints on how it'll develop. I'll do the next chapter as this is intriguing! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Hi Kiana! Thanks so much for the awesome review! :)

From the tiny snippet of information we get from the books about the Founders, Helga was always my favorite. She just seemed like someone I would want to meet :) So I wanted to write something that would give her a chance to shine. I think the first person is a big part of that--I want readers to get a chance to feel close to her. I'm glad you felt that in this chapter!

The muggleborn thing just came to me. I'm not even sure where it came from, but I knew I wanted blood prejudice to be a huge issue with the founders, especially since witchcraft was looked at with such suspicion and hatred back then. Helga and Godric's blood status will be playing a significant role in the rest of the story.

I definitely want to go back later and edit this chapter, so I really appreciate your honesty about the pacing. I'll keep your review in mind when I'm making changes later. Thanks again for the feedback!

I'm so glad you decided to read on! Thank you so much for the wonderful review. It was so helpful and really made my day!

--Maggie


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