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Review:adluvshp says:
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Aw this was such a heartbreaking start to what I am sure is a lovely story.

I think this was all very realistic. I liked the way you showed the immediate aftermath to the war, and Charlie's pain. I like the way you've built upon Charlie's character, him feeling guilty for not saving Fred in time, and then not wanting to speak to anyone etc. The bond between Bill and Charlie was also portrayed well.

The emotions flowed effortlessly throughout your narrative and it was quite touching. The overall chapter pace, flow, and grammar was quite good.

I really liked reading this. It definitely struck a chord! I am sure the onward chapters are equally well-written and I hope I get the chance to read them :)


Author's Response: Hello again!! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this!!

I'm really glad that you found this to be realistic!! It's something I tried really hard to achieve while I was writing it!! Thank you for the comments on building Charlie's character, and the relationship between him and Bill!! :D

I'm So glad you liked it! Thank you SO MUCH!!

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