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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! Review tag!

Oh, such a painful and terribly tragic story of love and betrayal. I'm glad you dealt with this topic of cheating - it's a very real and quite common issue in life. I think you really captured Victoire's heartbreak, shock and pain very well. It wasn't too subtle, but it was well-written. Your story flowed very nicely. The sudden startling change from happy, contented, over-the-moon Victoire to post-letter stunned and horrified Victoire was dramatic. You went into so much detail describing her happiness and excitement, her feelings of goodwill toward her sister, her sense of anticipation...that I really felt for her when she finds her whole world crashing down around her.

I would really have liked to hear Teddy and Dom's explanation to their affair, but I understand that Victoire is too highly-strung to hear any of it :( I know this is a Victoire-centred fic, but I was wondering if you could also expand on the characterisations of Dom and Teddy a little more. It would fill out your story a little, and really give a sense that their lives will also be drastically changed.

But I do think this is a wonderful little story, an episode of life. It's very dramatic, very angsty and very painful and there doesn't seem to be any redemption for any of the characters. Great job; I enjoyed this very much :)

-teh

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

That's true, it is a very real and common issue in real life, and I just had to write it, especially since I've experienced something very similar.

I worked hard on trying to get across Victoire's heartbreak, so its nice to know you found it well-written. I was aiming for my readers to really feel for her throughout her emotional ride, so I am glad that it had the desired effect.

Yeah, I dont think Vic would have stayed to hear their explanation, which is why you get to see Dom's side of story (sort of) in the prequel to this called "Ending It" :)

I'll think about editing this and expanding more on Dom and Teddy too though.

Thanks again for your review! I am happy you enjoyed this!


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