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Review:AlexFan says:
Hello! I'm back with your review. Is this the only chapter that I haven't reviewed yet because it feels like it is. Anyway, moving onto your story.

I like the fact that even though Oliver comes off as a complete jerk with no thought of his work and someone who just likes to get drunk a lot, he still has the decency to not laugh at Edie, even though her fall down the stairs was pretty funny.

I don't think Oliver actually realises what Rose is trying to do, I mean, sure, he has a lot of girls and stuff but it feels like he has no idea that Rose is flirting with him.

Poor Mrs. Dobbins, it just doesn't seem to be her lucky, having Edie fall down the stairs and land on her.

Onto Lisa, I like Lisa, she's one of those characters that's pretty and girly but still smart and can be serious. I personally don't think that you see a lot of characters like that in fanfiction so it's nice to see something new.

I'm not so fond of Lisa's fiance though, Justin. There's just something about him that feels off to me, like he isn't sincere but just something about him . . .

I never thought that high and mighty Rose would ever admit that Edie was a better writer than her. It was satisfying to see her admit that.

Yes, I get very attached to characters when I read things.

Keep a lookout so that you don't switch verb tenses, it happens to everyone sometimes and sometimes you overlook them so that's just a tip. Other than that, your grammar was great.

This isn't my favourite chapter but it's still a great one.

Alexfan is out, PEACE!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I think you're pretty much spot-on with your interpretation of Oliver, actually. Especially in terms of how he is too socially awkward/Quidditch-minded to notice that Rose is being ridiculously unprofessional. ;D

I need to give Justin some credit; there will definitely be an attempt to make the reader like him more in a later chapter. I just have so many characters to introduce and am trying to pace everyone so that it's not too much of an overload! hehe. But right now you're totally in the right to be kind of weirded out by Justin.

Thank you again so very much!


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