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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey I'm back again!

You said that you were more comfortable writing as a female and I know how you feel as writing as a male can be tricky. However I think you've captured James's thoughts brilliantly and I enjoy the insight into his mind, as we always know what Lily's thinking so it's nice to the role reversal. He's really funny as well especially the part when he says it's destiny that they're meant to deers.

I like how you've shown how much Lily has changed the arrogant bully James into someone's who gets nervous and is now hardworking. I think that's what some people miss so it's great that you added it in.

As it was the date chapter I can understand why the other Marauders didn't have much coverage however try and include them in the future as they're often the best parts in the stories.

The Corner - I certainly didn't predict that, I think it was a nice inclusion especially the 10 facts as it was a really sweet detail.

I think you have loads of description which is great as you can really imagine the scene unfolding before your own eyes. I think you've hit the right amount of fluff for a date scene and made it believable. I think the main reason why it's so believable is the fact that Lily's not pathetic but strong so she's more likeable as a result.

Feel free to re-request any time as this story is a really enjoyable read :)

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