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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's me again! I'm so glad you found my review insightful and I'm happy to help again:D

Though I thought Lily was weak in the previous chapters I'm glad she's got her personality back her as she was rather funny. Her little competition between her and James was also adorable to read. Well any Jilly interaction is!

You worried that the couple may be cliched but I think you've put Lily into quite a dominant role by her advances on James and you don't see that in many chapters. Also the fact her and Sirius aren't the best of friends at the moment makes it different to most. Just keep on being original really so it makes a more interesting read to the reader.

I would try and not read many other Jilly stories because if I read a story similar to mine I tend to copy some plot ideas from that, that way you avoid being cliched.

I think the fluff was toned down in this chapter despite them being together. I mean it's funny seeing James being love sick over her but after a while it gets boring so you made a good choice in turning it down:)

James and Sirius's bromance is so sweet and any interaction between them is always great! One tiny thing is that I would possibly like to see more of Remus and even Peter, as they are interesting characters :)

Overall I think it's going great and as I have time I'll do the next one to!

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