Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi it's patronus_charm with your review!

I really like how you just went straight into the story and immediatly grabbed people's interest. You said in the summary that Vanessa didn't have any answers and I can see why now. It left me wondering was her Dad just Marcus in disguise and he actually is a death-eater we know or he is just Marcus. Also her mother was a very interesting character as you're left wondering whether muggle or not, and how she can give her own daughter firewhiskey.

I'm guessing the 19 years later is significant due to the last chapter of HP being 19 years later and that's the year Albus and Rose start Hogwarts. I'm interested to see how you get to that part and how Vanessa deals with her Dad being a reformed death eater. It definitely does make you want to read on:)

The pace was fast as so much happened in that chapter with her parents and then her Dad taking her around Australia!

At a times I felt it a little awkward to read as I felt the sentence structure and choice of words could be improved, but I think you could fix that easily:)

I can't wait to see what house she's sorted into, so feel free to re-request at any time:)

Author's Response: Hey patronus_charm! Thank you for taking the time to review and give me feedback - it is very much appreciated! I'm glad that the Prologue hooked you and drew you in. At least I'm doing that right. I'll be sure to work on the flow and my sentence structure in the chapters to come. Thanks again :)

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 332
Submit Report: