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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Okay, so I won't lie. I haven't read ALL the chapters in this story, but I have read several. And when I saw earlier today that this didn't have any reviews yet, I was all like, "I need to fix this, Stat!" Of course, something came up before I got a chance to post and by the time I came back, two other people had already snuck in, but since there is no such thing as too many reviews...

Rose working side-by-side with her Dad is just about the cutest thing ever. And of course, your Ron is lovely. I always imagine adult Ron as having been really good at his job. I feel like it would be one area in his life where he wouldn't feel overshadowed (by his siblings, his famous friend, his wife!). Anyway, they make such a dynamic duo. Adult children interacting with their parents is always a tricky one, and you captured it perfectly. I loved the part:

-- I was used to it, since my life choices had annoyed her for years, but I didn't like it. This was why I usually didn't tell her what I was doing.

I have to say too, and I probably am only noticing this since I've been fighting with this in my current chapter, but you move from scene to scene brilliantly. You can write a few lines in one setting and then quickly move to the next, without making the reader feel like their head is spinning. You need to teach me how to do this without turning every interaction into a full-blown scene!

Enough rambling. This was lovely, my dear. I'm only sorry I was too late to be the first reviewer :P

Author's Response: Hahaha - don't feel bad, I haven't read all the chapters of Over The Edge yet either. I appreciate all reviews, even when you haven't read the whole thing ;)

I love Ron. I imagine him being good at his job too. I'm sure working for the famous Harry Potter he's still a bit overshadowed, but I think by this age (he's in his early 50s here) he's used to it and settled down. And Rose, the way I write her, hero-worships her dad a bit. Their interactions are really fun to write. Writing Ron and Hermione arguing is some of my favorite stuff ever. Nobody can make Hermione irrational quite like Ron can ;)

I like to jump scenes sometimes. Writing transitions - they left, they apparated, they walked down the street, etc - is so often boring and unnecessary. It's just a matter of deciding that nobody cares how they got there and starting off the next scene with a clever line lol

Thank you very much for the review! I'm squeeing over it.

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