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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hello!

Uh, if you don't remember me, I'm that girl who wanted to give 100 reviews out by the end of the month. XD

Anyway, I thought this was such a lovely story! A nice way to start my morning off. ♥. I love how a lot of aspects in the story aren't as cliched. :)

James talking to the Gryffindor quiddith team and discussing their plans, certainly grabs hold of the reader's attetion instantly. And you can just feel his nervousness and worry showing through, as well.

I think you've really done a well job portraying James in a more mature light. Hannah's crush on James was a nice touch, and I'm glad James didn't try flirt with her or anything because that would just be a bit creepy and pedo-ish, to be honest. XD

And it wasn't just James that was starting to mature here, Lily was too! I was really surprised she didn't go off at James at how stupid he was for throwing himself between Hannah and the bludger.

So yeah, I really liked the whole story. It's a nice break from what the yelling-Lily and immature-jerk-James we often see. Not that those don't show their mature sides, but I just feel like your story certainly emphasises on that a bit more. :)

Oh! And this is my favourite line out of the whole thing. It totally made me squeal so much.
'Well, someone will have to tell Hannah that my heart belongs to somebody else. It has done for a long time now.' James looked at Lily meaningfully.

Great job and I'll definitely be back for more! :D

~Izzy

Review eleven out of one hundred. XD

Author's Response: Hello :)

Thank you for a lovely review!!

I'm glad you enjoyed it and thought it wasn't too cliched!

Yeah - I brought Hannah into it to show how James is mature and to show he only has eyes for Lily. Even if he was immature before though - I like to believe that the latter statement was always true :)

Haha yeah as much as yelling-Lily is good when they're younger I like focusing on the more mature side of them. Less yelling and more loveliness :)

Oh, I'm really glad you love that line. I kinda like it too :) It just fit the James I had in my head so well!

Glad I could be part of your 100 reviews :) Good luck for the rest! Thanks again!

Lauren


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