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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello I'm back again with part 2 :D

Though the place is rather slow in this story I feel it suites it as if you added more action it would take away the essence of the story:) It also flows well so it makes it easy to read :)

I love how you made the story and characters relatively complex and different to how you imagined. I said Sirius feeling sad was unrealistic in the last review but I take it back now as you've explored and described his emtions more deeply here that you can relate to how he's feeling. An outsider who's not sure whether he wants to come back in or not.

I think the rest of the characters are great and I don't think I've ever said this but I'm starting to like the Black family and all their quirks. I think you've achieved quite a feat of making them likeable, especially the older members of it who you always invisaged being the most evil.

Overall I think this story is excellent and I can't really see anywhere to improve as I enjoy the slow pace of it. Feel free to re-request at any time as I would love to read more :D

Author's Response: Hey there again! Nice to see you back! :) And thank you for doing this chapter as well - you didn't need to!

Yeah, it is rather slow, but I'm not planning for it to take place over a long period of time, and most of it is more mind-games than serious, decisive action. That being said, I'm glad you think the slow pace suits it - I have trouble writing too much faster, lol!

Sirius is very much the outsider looking in in this, and that's kind of why I wanted to explore him a little more - because he's in such an odd position in his family. He's such a fascinating character!

Haha, I'm so glad you're starting to like them! And they definitely have their quirks, lol. I've never seen them as evil, honestly, more as having views which are very radical and dangerous and being not-altogether nice. But not evil. Or are they? Who knows? :P

Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)

Aph xx

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