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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi it's patronus_charm with your review!

I was a tiny bit confused at first as I initially thought it was from James's perspective then I saw the 'him' and thought he was gay. So maybe if you introduced the protagnist at the beginning instead of at the end it would avoid this confusion. Once I got over the inital confusion I really enjoyed the first chapter:)

I was a little worried a first that the chapter length was so small would you be able to set a good scene for the story, but you did :D I think it was a great way for James and Lydia to meet. Many people make James out to be cheeky and not serious however this was a nice change to see him in a mature role. I'm guessing this after Hogwarts so it was great that you showed that he can actual make that transtion into adulthood.

I think you have a real talent for changing the characteristics of a character but still making them believable and this is really good as it provides a refreshing change to the reader.

As this was such a short chapter I'll review the next 2 as well :)

Author's Response: Haha! Oh goodness, I did not even think about that. Nope, James is NOT gay :p Thanks for the review, and I think I will go back and change that. :)

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