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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hallo, it's patronus_charm avec your review! (I felt like introducing languages other than English today ;D)

I really like how you've formed Edie as a character as she provides witty insights into boring scenarios so that was fun to read. It was also interesting trying to figure out where she fitted in with the rest considering she wasn't mentioned in the HP books.

I also liked how you weaved some of the under-rated characters e.g. Justin, Lisa into the story and made them come alive. It was really good as their time at Hogwarts was just left to a brief sentence or so, so it was nice to see them as actual characters.

At times I felt it got a bit long-winded, that there wasn't action. As I'm just doing the first 2 chapters it may be because you're just introducing the characters and the plot. However as this is a comedy I anticipated a slightly faster pace.

You say you were afraid of cliches I couldn't really see any. I haven't read that many Oliver/OC stories so I may not be the best person to ask however I found this story original and quite different to anything I've read before :D I sometimes find the best stories are the ones with cliches as that's what the reader wants to happen so you shouldn't downplay them to much.

Overall I think this was a great start as it intrigued me into finding out how all of the characters know each other and how Edie fitted into Hogwarts. The main pointer really being maybe fasten the pace? I found it funny though and I think that's the main thing :)

Author's Response: Hallooo! Thank you very much for stopping by to read.

Yup, Edie is the product of my own brain. I like making original characters Hufflepuffs, partially because they are rarely mentioned in canon so OCs fit into the story quite easily, and partially because I think 'Puffs are highly underrated!

I actually plan to go and dissect the second chapter in particular. I appreciate your mentioning that it gets long-winded at times; it's definitely important to keep readers from being bored out of their skulls!

Thanks again!

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