Ello! I'm back... again. Long time no see, hm? On a slightly non-fic-related note, you need to write more. Mostly because I need to read more of your lovely writing and sad, tragic, deep fics and partially because you're always getting better and sooner or later you're going to win something and I'll be able to say 'I told you that you would'. Or something along those lines.
Anyway, gosh, you really do love the angst, don't you? But this is just something else. Most angst is sort of sad and I think I should feel sorry for the characters, but I don't, but when you do it, for some reason, I really feel for them, even if I'm also sitting there thinking '/insert character's name here/, you're an idiot'.
It's just... there's so much emotion in this and so much want and need and love and just everything that even though there's not much description (and I do love my description) and not overly much obvious character development, it just all fits together so very well. The style is great too - I love how you've divided it in two again, which one different character each time. It works so well for you. I also notice that Remus and certain Black family members have popped up again... can't be coincidence surely (but I do adore the Black family - every last one of 'em - so I really, really don't mind, lol) ;)
Remus and Tonks... I always thought they worked so well in the books and I don't usually read anything Remus/Sirius simply because I just can't really see it happening, you know, but you kinda go beyond that. It might just be me reading too much into this, but you kinda use the relationships more to show characterisation, traits, personality and emotions, rather than the relationships themselves. Obviously it's a bad relationship - it's not very lovely and almost certainly not healthy for either of them - but it works because they make it work and because somehow they do love each other, even if not the way they should love each other, if that makes sense.
The stream-of-consciousness is great. I really liked it. I thought you merged it really well with the rest of the story and I didn't really notice it, tbh, until I was about halfway through. The grammar and diction and things didn't bother me either - they're stylistic choices and worked, so they fitted and I honestly didn't even notice until I read the little notice at the bottom telling me about them.
So yes, I really, really liked this. I kinda want to hug both of them now, very tightly, until they beg me to stop, because it's not their faults. Not really, when you think about it.
Gah, reading your stuff always makes me feel so deep and insightful and introspective. It's lovely :)
Please write more. Pretty please.
Author's Response: Hi... yeah, it has, especially since I've been so lazy about reviewing and responding to reviews. And I'm getting there... slowly... I might even put something on the archives soon-ish, depending on when I get this whole 'plot' thing figured out.
I really do love the angst - though God knows it's the most ruined genre in fanfiction - and so does Remus, which is why I write so much of him. I'm going to stop writing Marauders at some point... but not yet. :D
You know what, I didn't even realise there was no description in this. That's so weird! But I did write as much emotion as I could fit into words, and it seems to have worked for you, so I've hopefully got away with it.
In DH, Tonks/Remus felt almost like borderline emotional abuse to me - she loves him so much and he's just so awful to her. Although maybe that's because R/S are my OTP.
But anyway - you're not reading too much into this... my philosophy on writing romantic relationships is that it's all about personalities and bringing certain traits out in those personalities. Which makes no sense at all, but, erm. Yeah. You put it much better than I could.
Thank you so so much for your review, and I'm really glad you liked this. ♡