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Review:Mystique says:
Hi, I'm here with your requested review.

I've read several stories similar to this in plot - with Dom having an affair with Teddy behind Victoire's back. However none of those stories that I read were from Victoire's Pov, so it was rather refreshing to read.

In your request you asked if this worked as a stand alone. I think it does work as a stand alone and after reading this one-shot it's made me want to go read the prequel to see what happens in it.

My only suggestion for you would be to maybe break Victoire and Dominique's big speeches to each other, as it is long and cramped together thereby making it harder to read.

Teddy/Victoire have always been one of my favourite pairings and I don't like seeing it when they break up. But I still think you portrayed them really accurately and you described the pain that Victoire was feeling, so vividly. I felt so bad to see her like that.

I really enjoyed though and I'm definitely going to go read the prequel now.

Charlie

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Its good to know that you found this a refreshing read.

I am relieved to know that it works well as a stand-alone. I'd definitely appreciate your feedback on the prequel too :)

I didn't think it would be difficult to read but now that you mention it, I'll break the paragraphs!

I worked hard on Vic's feelings, so I am glad that you found them portrayed well and could feel for her.

Thanks again for your thoughtful review. Would love to see your thoughts on the prequel as well!


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