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Review:caoty says:
Hey, I'm here from tag.

Okay, so this was several kinds of fluffy.

Teddy's voice really stands out in this fic. He's awkward and tells bad jokes and remembers the oddest things from National Geographic; he's a burst of uncontrollable adolescent energy. He's relatable, too, despite the random saving-Mother-Earth-green hair, and it works well.
I'd say that if you were to write a Teddycentric WIP with this kind of characterisation, you'd have to be careful about turning him into an actual character rather than a collection of cute quirks, but for a one-shot you don't really have that problem.

I do think Victoire fades into the background here a little bit - we don't get as much of a sense of her individuality as we do Teddy's - but considering how this one-shot is from Teddy's POV, that's okay.

Anyway - this was fun, and cute, and I s'pose that's what you were going for, so well done with this fic! :)

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm glad you like Teddy. I adore his character, and I really think that he's just and ordinary kind of teenage boy who has a rather coloured past, but is trying to make the best of things.

And I'm not sure about a WIP Teddy fic... You're right - this kind of voice would be very difficult to sustain over a large word count.

And yes - Victoire is a weak point - thank you for pointing that out! I wrote this in something like two hours, and that's not a good thing when you don't really have a handle on your leading lady's character!

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!


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