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Review:Pixileanin says:
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You definitely have a great setup for an enticing Charlie story from this first chapter. He's got a secret. He's in a bad place emotionally and he doesn't want any help. He's guilt-ridden and is forced to "Carry on" for the rest of the family.

Just as he was about to open up to Bill, he gets interrupted. Now I wonder how long it's going to be before he gets another chance like that. I'm sure it will be a while, otherwise there wouldn't be much story, would there?

I think the thing I like the most about this chapter is that Charlie feels guilty, but you didn't overdo it with the angst. It was just enough to get us there with him but you weren't beating us about the head and shoulders with it. It came across as sincere and believable.

Believe me, you've gotten me curiously curious and I want to know more. I shall definitely be back for more of this story sometime.

Happy writing!

Author's Response: Eek! Thanks so much!! :D

I'm really glad to hear you think this is a great first chapter! And haha; you're very insightful! Yes indeedy, it will be a while before he gets a chance to open up, unfortunately. :( But as you said, there wouldn't be much story otherwise!

I'm really glad you don't think the angst is overdone! That's something I've been worried about with this entire story; I want it to be believable grief without being too overdone, so I'm glad it came across that way!!

Aww, yay! I'm glad I've got you curiously curious and look forward to more reviews from you! Thanks SO much!!

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