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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi it's patronus_charm with your review!

You asked if there was too much fluff but I love fluff and there can never be too much so I'm probably not the best person to ask!

Even though I haven't read the first in the series I still managed to get the storyline which is really good for other people who may just want to start reading with this one first!

I found you could really connect with James and he was really believable. The way he carved their initals into the tree was adorable and then you find out that they aren't together any more! You can really sympathise with his problem the girl of his dreams or protecting one of his best friends. Luckily he has good friends who don't mind sharing their secret!

The other characters are really good as well especially Sirius his reaction to 'we need to talk'! It was a little cliche with whole are they or aren't they going to get back together. However I feel cliche shouldn't be underrated as some of the best stories I've read are full of cliches.

A couple of pointers now, a noticed a few spelling errors so just rereading it should get rid of those :) You don't want to make Lily too weak as she is a stong character she was in the Order of the Phoenix after all! So remember though it is a fluff story don't forget to give her some strong traits. However I'm reading her in post-break up mode so she may have them already as I haven't read the other book I don't know.

Overall I really enjoyed reading it especially as it was in diary form which was unusual. Feel free to re-request again!

Kiana :)

Author's Response: Hi there :) First off, thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate you taking the time.

I'm glad to hear you like fluff and it sounds like you don't feeling I was over-fluffing things- which is excellent!

I'm glad that you feel that way about the storyline and that it can be picked up even without reading the 1st story.

I'm incredibly happy to hear you believe James- like I wrote in my request, that is one of my biggest areas of insecurity in this story just because I feel WAY more comfortable writing from a girl's perspective...for obvious reasons!

haha I'm so happy you likes Sirius. I understand the cliché you're spotting there and that can definitely be addressed. thanks for the heads up! and also thanks for the similar notice of the spelling errors! I knew there were bound to be one or two...or seventeen in there!

Thanks again so much for doing this! I'm coming back for another review most definitely- your advice is very insightful.
-Emma


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