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Review:GingeredTea says:
A lot of things in this story made me laugh. At first, I was a bit disjointed by Tonk's perspective, because it is a bit...well odd, but Tonks is odd, so it is sort of charming and endearing. Plus, you make her very funny.

I simply loved it - I don't know what else to say. It was a bit awkward to get into, but not overly so. I couldn't stop reading long enough to make a ramble comment. ;) Thanks for the read!

I did find a few typos, so here they are:

You have an extra 'the' in this sentence: "I always had this strange feeling like she could look right into my head and see all of the very unladylike [[the]] things I was dying to do to her son."

I think you need to add the word 'up' here and remove 'with': "Maybe being able to change your appearance at will screws {with} your sense of self [UP] worse than people realize.
Why? Because the phrase "self worth" is really common and the with is a little disjointed - together they had my mind asking - 'is this, supposed to be self worth and she forgot the 'more'?

Do you mean 'races' or 'rears' here? He [rares] forward on his front paws, pressing his hind legs against the base of a tree and launching himself at me.

I think you meant 'I' here: [It] finish pulling the jumper down over my undershirt and turn to find a slightly worried look on his face.

Author's Response: OK, so I'm not going to respond to this in order, because I want to thank you for pointing out the typos first. After a thorough beta read, nearly 300 chapter-reads and 10 other reviews, you managed to find things that everyone else missed, so my hat is off to you!

On to the substantive stuff, I'm really glad that the story pulled you in. This was one of those stories that wound up being so long that I was afraid I was going to lose people partway through. I'm glad that didn't happen.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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