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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey here's part 2 :D

I liked how you showed that grief doesn't just fade away immediatly after the event that it continues to affect you for ages. This perfectly carried on the mood and tone you set in the previous chapter :)

I loved Ron, normally I don't ship Ron/Hermione as I'm more of a Dramione but I really wanted Ron to get his act together and profess his love for her in this chapter. I could really believe it was Ron from his worrying over Hermione and his lack of nerves. Even though he'd hate to be described like this - he was adorable!

I noticed a few more grammar issues and these could be easily be resolved by just proof reading in detail. I know it's boring but just doing that really improves the flow of the story. If you don't want to do that you could consider a proof reader as they're great to have ;D

I really like this story especially the mention of the giant squid I think that alone made my day:D Well done, Kiana x

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked the Ron/Hermione part. I always see them as so perfect together apart from the fact that neither of them are good at just saying how they feel, so they might get bogged down in misunderstandings.
Thank you so much for these reviews - I'll be sure to check everything over again :)

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