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Review:my_voice_rising says:
hello, hello, hello!

i already like your characterization of james, and how he found hannah's "habit" of having a crush on him annoying. i enjoy this characterization of him so much better than the womanizing heartthrob ;) and i really appreciate that lily didn't look away in a huff when they made eye contact from across the pitch, or that he didn't try to grin roguishly or turn her hair pink or something.

is 'mary' and 'sue' intentional? hehehe... i hope it is.

aghhh reading the quidditch commentary is so fun! especially with the obviously biased commentator ;D and poor james! he's just trying to help his friends... how heroic and sweet. i love that we can see parallels between your portrayal of him and jkr's portayal of harry!

and lily! lily, lily, lily! she is not full of bad temper and irrationality, and is being a know-it-all and lecturing him while he is unconscious! i love it. and her reaction when she sees him wake up. AND her subtly mentioning his fanclub, and hannah, and mary... she's totally jealous! really nice dynamic between the two of them here.

OH MY GOD SO CUTE. "i'll always be waiting for you." ah! please tell me this is not a one-shot. it's entirely too adorable to be over already!

Author's Response: Hello :)

Gah - thanks so much for an amazing review!!

This one-shot was trying to show the more mature side of James so I'm glad you liked his characterisation! My James only has time for Lily so even though he doesn't mind Hannah - her crush is kind of annoying! And same goes for Lily - she's starting to accept James and isn't being so huffy with him. I'm so happy you picked up on these points!!

Oh, sorry to say that 'Mary' and 'Sue' where completely accidental. it made me laugh when you pointed that out though!

I'm glad you thought the Quidditch commentary was good. It was so hard to write. It ended up being shorter than originally intended as I found it so hard!

Haha - yes Lily is jealous. As I said previously this was supposed to be her coming round to the idea of James Potter and she isn't liking the competition!

I'm really glad you enjoyed this piece! I'm sorry to say but this was orginally was supposed to be the ending to the one-shot but I've had a few people mention the possibility of more and since responding to all the lovely reviews I've had on it I must say I have been considering writing some more to it. So - watch this space :)

Thanks again for an amazingly lovely review!
Lauren


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