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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hello, I am here with your (very, very, very) late requested review! From the description I can tell that this is going to be a really unique story. Can't wait to get started!

I love this: "The end is like the beginning uncertain." You should probably distinguish between what is your author's note and what's the beginning of the story, because with the next few sentences it's hard to tell.

Wow. Your first scene is really haunting. I have to say that this is one of the best characterizations of Voldemort that I've read on HPFF. His absentminded and bored demeanor when torturing a child is so chilling. And I love Devlin's resolution and refusal to scream; so much like Harry.

The scene with the kidnapping was heartbreaking as well. Poor Harry, trying to remain calm and keep his son alive, but completely beside himself with fear. The dog barking was such a small detail but it really added to the tension. Well done. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes in this section that I noticed. Also I think the "Four Years Later" thing always takes away from a story. Clearly you are a gifted writer; I think you could find a way to work that in to the narrative of the story without having to blatantly say it. It always reads a bit like a comic book or something, like saying "Meanwhile..." and such XD

The interrogation scene was very well-done as well. I do think, though, that Harry would immediately go to the Truth Serum. If it's available, why wouldn't they use it when questioning Death Eaters? Dumbledore and co. didn't wast a minute without it in the books; I think that Harry would do the same.

Damn. This is really, really good. And suspenseful. What an ending! Perhaps you would benefit from splitting this up into two chapters because this is so emotionally heavy, not to mention a complicated plot to fit into the space of one chapter. But all in all, I think this is an incredibly written story.

Author's Response: First, thanks for your review! I've had a couple other comments about the "four years later" and am currently trying to find a suitable solution.

As for the Truth Serum I felt two things: J.K. Rowling has said that won't work on someone who is a master at legilimency and I feel that if someone was under a magical Oath and you FORCED them to tell, you might do some brain damage. Typically in the books (as far as I can recall) it has been used on characters that have little value in that the act had already been done, for instance.

Besides that, I felt that Harry might not really WANT to know for certain whether this man was lying about his son being alive... He sends the man off to bring his son to him and clearly you would think he'd have some way of tracking this man or contacting him, but I feel like Harry purposefully forgot these things so that he doesn't HAVE to know. He is a broken man who has been given hope and he is terrified of it being taken away from him.

It was originally two chapters...I guess I just wanted people to know what they would be missing if they didn't read on.

Thanks so much and glad you liked it!

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