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Review:Mystique says:
Hi, I'm here with your requested review.

This was such a sweet one-shot. I loved it and I thought you portrayed Lily and James really realistically and extremely un-cliched.

I really liked how none of the Marauders were on the Quidditch team except for James and the OC's that you invented. And even though Peter, Sirius and Remus weren't in this one-shot I still liked the little mentions of them. Especially the one about them being kicked out or that it was dinner time.

I have to confess that I had a little bit of a fangirl moment when I read about James unconsciously looking in the crowd for Lily!

I think the conversation between Lily and James was really well written. James came across as rather mature at some points, which was nice to read. And of course he was a little bit flirtatious as well.

I have to say that I'm a little bit disapointed that you didn't include the 'thing' scene where Lily was going to tell him something. My guess is that it would be that she likes him. I'm hoping you write another one-shot about that so fingers crossed.

Charlie

Author's Response: Hello :)

Thank you so much for a lovely review!

I just couldn't bring myself to put any of the other Marauders on the team. In my head that was James' thing. I haad good fun making up the OC's though!

Aw, I'm glad you liked all the Lily/James moments. They are the best to write by far!! the point of this one-shot was to try and show the mature James so I'm glad that came across as well as his flirtatious side. Some things wouldn't change!

Oh, I'm sorry to disappoint! This was supposed to be the ending to the one-shot but I've had a few people mention the possibility of more and since responding to all the lovely reviews I've had on it I must say I have been considering writing some more to it. Anyway - watch this space :)

Thanks again for a lovely review!
Lauren


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