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Review:Remus says:
So! I had to come read this! And I'm ignoring the fact that I need to sit down and plan chapter 6 of HPo4.This sounds like a better thing to do though!

I can tell that you're out of your comfort due to one thing...it felt rushed. Like you couldn't wait for the story to wrap up. The beginning had a great pace but when you introduced Lily, that's the part it felt rushed. Then again, I'm used to seeing 7K-10K words per chapters when it comes to your stories. So yeaaah!! XD

I really like the contrast Severus sees between Lily saying sorry and Eileen's constant apology. When it comes to Snape/Lily...I never ship them...however, I understand that Severus comes from an abused household and always saw Lily as his safe haven and I think he fell in love with the idea of being safe with her.

So I really like that you brought that into the story. I felt truly bad for Sev at the beginning. And the anger he feels towards Eileen is also so real but the hatred he has for Tobias is what I really liked to read. How he, despite being angry with his mother, still tried to defend her. He might have failed but he still tried. He even acknowledged that when he's older he might be able to take on his father without an issue. You actually managed to capture a true moment in an abused child's moment.

Overall this was a beautiful piece! I really liked reading it! How did it feel being away from your comfort zone?

Until next time, Jami!

--Rosie

P.S. And now I have a plot bunny thanks to you! A one-shot of him actually going after his father before severing all ties with him. Hmm...decisions...decisions...
You're evil!! :O

Author's Response: Being out of my confront zone was TERRIFYING. SO FREAKING SCARY. Seriously. This was originally planned as a four part round about sort of story. Part 1 - Severus watches his mother apologizes over and over, but she never fixes it. He doesn't understand why and it crushes him as well as makes him angry. Part 2 -- Lily apologizes and *fixes it* giving him something to believe in, something to understand that you can always fix it. Part 3 -- Severus calls Lily a mudblood and apologizes. For the first time he understands you can't always fixes it, and wonders if this is how his mother felt. Helpless to change something so terrible... and that brings out a much angrier side of him. Part 4 -- Severus, freshly graduated, apologizes to his father that he doesn't have an antidote to the fatal potion he just gave him. He's fixing the fact that his mother could never get away, and delivers one final, very cold apology to his father. Phew. Hahah.

Anyway, that was the first plan. But I learned that I just can't write adult Severus without my own biased. I can't write his feelings for Lily past childhood the way a Snape Lily fan thinks of them... and since this was for Amanda I wanted to make sure that my -no snape and lily- biased self didn't include any of those feelings in it. Which was pretty impossible for me as soon as he reached Hogawartsish age :P

But I was absolutely out of my comfort zone, hahah. I sort of wish I would have made it longer... but I felt like short and sweet (except not so sweet) was my best bet at not messing it up :P.

I'm so happy that you liked this piece. I really wanted to bring out that sympathy for Severus, and I'm sure you can imagine how difficult that was for me :P

This review was such a nice surprise! And Sorry I've attacked you with plunnies! mwahahhaa ♥


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