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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! I'm from the Review Tag :)

First of all, I'm so happy to read a fic about minor Slytherin characters! Slytherins (especially minor Slytherin characters) in fanfiction are always portrayed as an unpleasant two-dimensional lot, whose sole function of existing within a story is to be hated and be some sort of antagonist.

I love how you wrote your characters of Tracey and Theodore with depth, empathy and detail and made them such convincing and relatable characters. There's Tracey, who has quite a nice touch of vulnerability to her characterisation, and who is an outsider even in her own House and among her own roomates/classmates. You've written her sense of inferiority, and lack of confidence very well, and yet you've also given her a sense of direction and determination; Tracey yearns to be accepted and loved by her classmates. In contrast, Theodore seems to have more "traditional" Slytherin character traits; I think as a character he is scheming and cunning and manipulative and rather arrogant as well. There are also hints of jealousy and possessiveness of Daphne in his characterisation. You've done a great job in getting into the mind of a flawed character.

I think your story flows very well, and the voices of both Theodore and Tracey are very strong and well-differentiated from each other. Both POVs contrast each other nicely.

OK, well, I think this is a fantastic start! I'm keen to read more of your story and I'll probably come by again soon :) Great work!

-teh

Author's Response: Teh you don't know how happy you've made me with this review! With this story, I wanted to show another side to being Slytherins. I think that it would be really hard to be them. To always have to put on a face for other people so that was my concept for this story, along with gossip girl. Wow your thoughts on my characterizations of Tracey and Theo are just amazing! I can't believe you think i've got them pretty spot on! Thank you so much for this amazing review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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