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Review:Secret Santa says:
I'm not an expert on Quidditch mathematics, but if Gryffindor is already leading in points before the final, I would assume that they'd basically only need to make sure that the Gryffie Seeker catches the Snitch, since it gives 150 points on its own. Unless, of course, Slytherin Chasers are mindblowingly good that year and score constantly. Just a little glitch there, food for thought and so forth... :)

I really liked that you didn't put all the Marauders in the team, but used your imagination and OCs instead. Quidditch match itself was fun to read about. It would be very much like James to care more about the welfare of his Seeker and the result of the game than his own health.

The hospital wing scene was quite cute. Lily admonishing James about being a stupid Quidditch enthusiast, and James secretly enjoying that he finally gets her attention. I liked that you made James frank about his feelings and putting it out there, even though he might get shot down again. I'm pretty sure they had quite lovely time at the party.

The pace was excellent and dialogue was quite natural to the characters. All in all, it was a nice fluffy one-shot about James and Lily.

Happy New Year!

Super Secret Santa :P

Author's Response: Hello Santa!

Hmm - yes. While I was writing this I didn't think I'd got the mathematics of it all quite right but it started to make my head hurt trying to figure it out. I hoped I'd either got it right by some miracle or people would overlook it. I will go back over it and try and sort it... thanks for pointing it out :)

Yeah I couldn't put the other Marauders in the team. Sirius maybe but I just don't see the other two being in the team so I just stuck with James. I had fun making up the other characters :)

Oh - the hospital scene was my favourite bit to write by far :) James is great fun to write and I loved it. I'm so glad you liked it too!!

Thank you for the lovely review Santa :)
Lauren


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