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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there and a belated Merry Christmas/Happy New Year! Sorry for the delay - I would have got these to you earlier, but my wrist played up again and made it very difficult to type. Reviews are still coming, though, don't worry! ;)

I've been on a bit of a Black family-centric trip recently and I've debated about reading this for a while now - it looks so good! I admit that I did hesitate seeing as it's an AU and I'm not usually interested in AUs (you know, different chosen one, etc.) but it drew me in anyway :P

I love how you started off with describing the house and Kreacher and the other house-elves in the kitchen. It gave such a sense of superiority to the whole family, despite the fact that it wasn't like something serious was happening - it just felt like that. Also, Kreacher was really well characterised with his little mutters and his loincloth and attitude and adoration of Regulus.

Orion and Walburga are kinda creepy parents, but I like how you made an obvious distinction between how they treat Regulus and how they treat Sirius, particularly in Walburga's case. You also really captured the feeling that Sirius is openly rebelling against his family, their beliefs and everything, with the magazines, breaking things and comments. The idea of a ring signifying status as the heir of the family was a lovely touch, too. A nice symbol of the passing of the torch from Sirius to Regulus - really shows how annoyed with the former his family are.

Regulus was just so heart-breaking. He's already determined to join the Dark Lord and we know what's going to happen (or not, as the case may be) in the future. It's just... he seems so very, very young even though he's obviously trying to be older. I liked the touch of him biting his lip. I don't know why, but it just stood out to me for some reason. Maybe coz when I write him I make him have the same habit, lol, but also it just highlighted the age thing.

I'm really curious as to how Lily's going to come into this. Surely she and Reg won't just start up a conversation somewhere in Hogwarts... it seems too simple. They're characters from such different worlds, I'm really curious to see how they meet and how the note comes into it. I'm assuming that the note is from Regulus, at any rate... unless it's someone else... maybe Lily to Regulus? I don't know! Gah, I wanna read more! (I will :D)

This is a really, really attention-grabbing beginning. I'm pretty much hooked and you've started so many questions with the brilliant summary, even though not much happened in this chapter.

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hi Aph! Thanks so much for this lovely gift!

You know, it is fairly AU, but I don't think I would consider it AU enough to be a real plot-changer. I tried to make everything seem as plausible and consistent with canon as possible, while allowing some creative license.

It's great that you enjoyed this glimpse into a "normal day" in the life of the Black family. I wanted to make it clear that Sirius doesn't fit without having to resort to yelling and throwing of possessions. Similarly, I wanted to show Orion and Walburga's clear favoritism for Regulus without them outright saying it. I'm glad all of that came through okay for you.

Really, he has the same habit? Haha, that's cute. I just wanted to show that he's got this juvenile, almost innocent side. He's not quite cut out to be a cold-blooded Death Eater. Writing him does tend to make me sad :(

Well, I guess you'll have to keep reading to see where Lily comes in! I'm glad the beginning drew you in, and thanks once again!

-Amanda


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