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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there! I'm here from the Review Tag :)

This is such a lovely piece of writing. Your use of second person POV was very smooth and did not impede my reading of the story at all - which is great as second person can sometimes get a little jarring. Your narrative flowed beautifully from start to finish.

I love how you wrote Snape's emotional development, from a naive brittle child to someone darker and more bitter. And I also appreciate the contrasts between Snape's views of his mother as a weak-willed woman who can't escape the continuous abuse by her husband, and of Lily as a bright-eyed, cheerful and free-spirited girl.

And I love how Lily offers to get her mum to wash Snape's jumper for him. That was such a nice touch, and a lovely bit of detail, and I'm so glad Snape chose to follow her :)

I think this is a beautiful piece of writing you have here; it's a simple but emotionally nuanced story, and y ou've really painted a convincing picture of Snape's childhood. Great work, I really enjoyed this :)

-teh

Author's Response: Hi m'dear! I'm so happy you liked the second person PoV in this! I've been playing with it a bit more... on this story and then my other one, Fairy Dust, and it's actually something that I really enjoy stepping into. It kind of feels like it gives it sort of a poetic finish... or maybe I'd just like to think that :P

I'm so happy that contrast came out clearly. It's hard for me to imagine why Severus would become best friends with Lily. She stands for a lot of the things he hates. Social acceptance, being a muggle born... so I really wanted to give him a reason to latch onto her.

Thank you so much for this very well thought out review. You often just get a few sentences that don't really relate to your story in review tag, so it's always so awesome to get someone who really puts effort into their review! I'm so happy you enjoyed this!

Jami


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