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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! Here for tag!

This is definitely something new for me! Not only have i never read a story from either of these characters PoV, but the fact that it shows a lesser known, 'weak' link of the Slytherin house is very interesting!

I liked the way you started it on the train but not joining in with Hogwarts express sort of fun. Instead she's very stuck in her own thoughts about what her parents are going through, her part in it... I'm curious as to if that divorce will come back into play...

I really liked the small changes you made to kind of show off that she is a Slytherin. I believe I've usually read the trolly lady descriptive as sweet, so having her described as haggard was really a reminder that, thought Tracey is different, she's still not a kind, optimistic Hufflepuff or anything. Small things like that were throughout the story and really enhanced it!

The switch to Theo was done well, and I think you did an excellent job at making the characters have very different narrative voices. I have ideas of what he may have seen.. Daphne may possibly be into the same sex, and is trying to cover that up... her and Theo have some sort of 'I'll scratch your back if you scratch mine' deal going on? But now if others noticed Daphne staring at a girl, that would be quite embarrassing for Theo... hmm... am I right?!

This was a smooth read and really opened up a lot of questions! Which is perfect for a first chapter!

Author's Response: Aw this review has given me feels! While this first chapter deals with lesser known Slytherins, the story does deal with 8 different povs so some are well known like draco and pansy and others are like Tracey and Theo. The divorce does come back into play in later chapters, I think each chapter that has Tracey as the main character will show how the divorce is changing her and her thoughts, at least hopefully it will. I'm so glad you noticed those small things like using the word haggard in the descriptions. It really is more what Tracey is because she is kind of a shy girl which is not exactly a Slytherin trait but she has more the mind of a Slytherin than actions of one. Well you might be right about Daphne and her feelings, but I guess the only way to really find out whats going on would to be to read more! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter and I do hope you'll come back and read more! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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